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 Post subject: Once Upon A Time
PostPosted: Tue Nov 15, 2011 6:57 pm GMT 
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What is this I don't even-

Title: Once Upon A Time
Summary: The story of how a fairytale becomes a nightmare. // My (likely very inaccurate) interpretation of how Atlas' empire fell.
Rating: K+ for mild/moderate violence
Genres: Drama/Tragedy
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7554847/1/Once_Upon_A_Time

Behold: Dolphinz' epic fail at writing. Basically I wanted to fill up the Lackdaisy archives, make it look like our amazing fandom is bigger than it is. I like criticism. And yes, I realize that there is a 92.6% percent chance of this not being canon. I DON'T CARE, OKAY D: I've splashed hints of Atlas/Mitzi and Rocky/Mitzi in there for shippers. ;D

EDIT: I just realized that there are a lot of typos. Sigh. I can't edit on my phone, so I'll get them tomorrow.

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 Post subject: Re: Once Upon A Time
PostPosted: Tue Nov 15, 2011 9:56 pm GMT 
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Quote:
"You are always seeing people. Mostly your mother. SHE IS DEAD."

I love that quote. A lot.

It isn't canon, I'm sorry to say - one of Viktor's knees was busted during the war and the other had something to do with Mordecai when he quit Lackadaisy. It's in the "Stupid Questions" forum.

Other than that, it's good.


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 Post subject: Re: Once Upon A Time
PostPosted: Wed Nov 16, 2011 1:36 am GMT 
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FWIW, I spun my own take on the second knee incident and it's even in this forum...though nobody's commented on it...(sniffle)

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 Post subject: Re: Once Upon A Time
PostPosted: Wed Nov 16, 2011 2:51 pm GMT 
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Conradin wrote:
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"You are always seeing people. Mostly your mother. SHE IS DEAD."

I love that quote. A lot.

Haha, thank you. ^^

Conradin wrote:
It isn't canon, I'm sorry to say - one of Viktor's knees was busted during the war and the other had something to do with Mordecai when he quit Lackadaisy. It's in the "Stupid Questions" forum.

Welp, there goes my credibility. Just when I thought I knew all there was about Lackdaisy, you give me these crucial pieces of information. I guess writing a story all in one sitting makes you want to avoid looking up anything because... story... and... I'unno.

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FWIW, I spun my own take on the second knee incident and it's even in this forum...though nobody's commented on it...(sniffle)

Well, then I'll go check it out! (:

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 Post subject: Re: Once Upon A Time
PostPosted: Wed Nov 16, 2011 8:28 pm GMT 
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That would be awesome. :) I'm a little disappointed that it has 98 views but no comments...I've heard more about it from non-LD fans so far.

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 Post subject: Re: Once Upon A Time
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A rather interesting alternate-universe take on things. I don't think it could be reconciled with canon without taking a wrench to your story, unfortunately.

I enjoyed how you got into Rocky's head, and you definitely kept the story moving...possibly a little too quickly.

I tend to think Viktor's kneecapping...either one...is something pivotal to the person he becomes, and as such if you're going to invoke it in a story, I'd recommend treating it with the epicness it deserves...unless you're going for ironic. :)

I'm not sure your version of Mitzi and her relationship with Atlas quite meshed with what I have in my head concerning them, but I'll admit Mitzi isn't one of the characters who I've given a great deal of thought to. I'm still hoping the comic will make her less of a cipher to me.

Keep on writing! I'd be happy to offer what feedback and support I can.

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i shouldn't post... ever
 Post subject: Re: Once Upon A Time
PostPosted: Sat Jul 07, 2012 1:42 am GMT 
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Why did i only find this now?
i think i like it, & on the other story only found one historical error where prohibition did not start for 1 year & 13 days later but i see that in alot of fan stories. Are you planning more?

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 Post subject: Re: Once Upon A Time
PostPosted: Sat Jul 07, 2012 8:17 pm GMT 
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NONONONONONO BURY THIS BURY THIS

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Nope.iso

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 Post subject: Re: Once Upon A Time
PostPosted: Mon Jul 16, 2012 2:00 am GMT 
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Dolphinz wrote:
NONONONONONO BURY THIS BURY THIS

This because i read it or because you think your writing was embarrassing if other people read it?
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